Essay+on+The+River

Essay on __The River__ Dear Rose and Taylor: The conflict is improved, as is the page 96-132 summary, but the conclusion still could use with more specifics about how you might apply it to your future lives. Final earned grade is 95. Mr. Baskin 1/27/12

**Student: Rose Ianuzzi and Taylor Reilly** **88 points. See my suggested correx. Revise. Go for 100.**


 * Grading Points Rubric for Essential-Question Essay on __The River__**

**FULL CREDIT. 10 PTS.**
 * 1) **Introduction Paragraph:** Thesis/topic sentence; at least three traits stated; explanation of how the essay will proceed.
 * Maximum Number of Points: 10 POINTS EARNED:**


 * 1) **Traits Paragraph:** List the traits; define each trait; provide a brief example from the novel for the trait.
 * Maximum Number of Points: 15 POINTS EARNED:**
 * FULL CREDIT. 15 PTS .**


 * 1) **Conflict Paragraph:** Description of the conflict at the beginning of the novel; description of how the conflict changes; explanation of what is similar to and different between the two conflicts.
 * Maximum Number of Points: 15 POINTS EARNED:**
 * 12 PTS. DESCRIBE/EXPLAIN HOW THE CONFLICT CHANGES, ALSO, AND HOW IT STAYS THE SAME. JUST ADD TO THIS SECTION. OK? BE SURE THAT YOU HAVE A SENTENCE THAT SAYS WHAT THE CONFLICT IS WHEN DEREK FIRST VISITS BRIAN AT HOME WITH HIS QUESTION/REQUEST. THEN, WRITE A SENTENCE THAT DESCRIBES WHAT THE CONFLICT IS WHEN THEY FIRST GET TO THE WOODS. THEN, I THINK YOU HAVE A SENTENCE ALREADY ABOUT WHAT THE CONFLICT IS AFTER THE LIGHTNING STRIKE. **

Sixty-seven blanks to use the following thinking-process terms: observe or observation; wonder or reflect or reflection; name or naming or identify or identification; consider alternatives or options or considering; predict or predicting or prediction; choose a solution or make a choice or solve or choose; make a plan or prepare a plan or plan; gather resources; act or do or perform a solution.
 * 1) **Fill-in-the-Blanks Paragraphs on the Thinking Process/Problem Solving:**
 * Maximum Number of Points: 25 POINTS EARNED**
 * 25 POINTS. **

From twenty to forty sentences summarizing what Brian is doing on these pages using the vocabulary of the thinking process. **13 POINTS. ADD DETAIL. THIS IS A BIT TOO VAGUE. AND USE THINKING PROCESS WORDS.**
 * 1) **Summary of Paragraphs 97-132 in terms of the Thinking Process**
 * Maximum Number of Points: 20 POINTS EARNED:**

Restatement of the message or lesson of the novel; explanation of why this is an important message or lesson to know; description of how the writer of the essay (the student) can specifically use this lesson in his/her life in the future. **13 POINTS. ADD A SENTENCE ABOUT HOW--SPECIFICALLY--YOU WILL APPLY/USE THE LESSON OF THIS NOVEL IN YOUR FUTURE LIFE, ASIDE FROM EMERGENCY, SURVIVAL SITUATIONS WHICH IS UNLIKELY, HIGHLY UNLIKELY**.
 * 1) **Conclusion**
 * Maximum Number of Points: 15**